Thursday, November 12, 2009

Deciding Between Variables

Here are three options for my lines. My haiku reads:

The swift growth of spring
Colt mothered in the field
Now you are alone.

I believe that choices two and three mimic the first to marks better than the first choice. The last shapes in boy options two and three mimic the first two marks of their lines better. I believe that choice two or three would be the best option. On option one, the last mark looks like someone with their hands up in their air which seems to literal or dramatic for the haiku, maybe even too "loud".





2 comments:

  1. Good observations about the misleading characteristics in opt #1.

    As you mentioned, opt #2 and #3 are formally consistent in how they are rendered, but you also need to address what it is communicating. Since the core concept of that line is "alone", opt #2 seems to do that best, don't you think?

    But opt #2 alone shape does need to be a bit larger in size in comparison to the long meadow shape. opt #3 is a good model.

    The bottom of the ink-blown shape is doing most of the work to communicate "growth" and "spring", while the top sprig is mostly a random result of how far the ink spread. If you cut the shape down it wont loose its meaning but will have more prominence on the screen and match the others in scale.

    But, in your storyboards, consider letting that extra length make an appearance in the transition.

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  2. Also, since your shapes are so solid, I want you to try them as vector (as well as bitmap).

    Trace them in illustrator following the method in project 2. Or place the image in illustrator and then use "live trace" option. After, you will need to make a few curve adjustments and line quality refinements with the pen tool but it is an easy step with such simple shapes. Do a quick test on spring or alone shapes and we'll discuss the viability of proceeding this way in class. You will loose the gray tones but it may be more desirable.

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